Posted by: jockmackenzie | December 4, 2009

Story Writing – using “Goldilocks and the Three Bears”

Thanks to fotosearch for the picture

Most students know many of the fairy tales. I offer them here because, during my teaching career, I couldn’t lay my hands on the text of a variety of well-known fairy tales so that students could work with a specific tale. I have massaged each offering to make it suit my needs (e.g. the opening and closing sentences). I will continue to post fairy tales but will add some kind of teaching idea with each post.

I am a fan of the “Less is More” School. Students who re-write fairy tales don’t need to re-write the entire story. For “Goldilocks,” how about re-writing the porridge, the chairs, and the bed part OR how about a different ending OR how about a clearer explanation of antecedent action?

Goldilocks and the Three Bears

Once upon a time, a long time ago, in a far away place, there was a little girl named Goldilocks.  She went for a walk in the forest.  Pretty soon, she came upon a house.  She knocked and, when no one answered, she walked right in.

At the table in the kitchen, there were three bowls of porridge. Goldilocks was hungry.  She tasted the porridge from the first bowl.

“This porridge is too hot!” she exclaimed.

So, she tasted the porridge from the second bowl.

“This porridge is too cold,” she said

So, she tasted the last bowl of porridge.

“Ahhh, this porridge is just right,” she said happily and she ate it all up.

After she’d eaten the breakfasts, she decided she was feeling a little tired.  So, she walked into the living room where she saw three chairs.  Goldilocks sat in the first chair to rest her feet.

“This chair is too big!” she exclaimed.

So she sat in the second chair.

“This chair is too big, too!” she whined.

So she tried the last and smallest chair.

“Ahhh, this chair is just right,” she sighed.  But just as she settled down into the chair to rest, it broke into pieces!

Goldilocks was very tired by this time, so she went upstairs to the bedroom.  She lay down in the first bed, but it was too hard. Then she lay in the second bed, but it was too soft. Then she lay down in the third bed and it was just right.  Goldilocks fell asleep.

As she was sleeping, the three bears came home.

“Someone’s been eating my porridge,” growled the Papa bear.

“Someone’s been eating my porridge,” said the Mama bear.

“Someone’s been eating my porridge and they ate it all up!” cried the Baby bear.

“Someone’s been sitting in my chair,” growled the Papa bear.

“Someone’s been sitting in my chair,” said the Mama bear.

“Someone’s been sitting in my chair and they’ve broken it all to pieces,” cried the Baby bear.

They decided to look around some more and when they got upstairs to the bedroom, Papa bear growled, “Someone’s been sleeping in my bed,”

“Someone’s been sleeping in my bed, too” said the Mama bear.

“Someone’s been sleeping in my bed and she’s still there!” exclaimed Baby bear.

Just then, Goldilocks woke up and saw the three bears.  She screamed, “Help!”  And she jumped up and ran out of the room.  Goldilocks ran down the stairs, opened the door, and ran away into the forest.  And she never returned to the home of the three bears.

In their own homes, everyone lived happily ever after.

THE END

Thanks to the folks at this site for the majority of the text to “Goldilocks and the Three Bears.”

http://www.dltk-teach.com/rhymes/goldilocks_story.htm

I. Introduction:

A. Setting:
1. Time:
Past  X
Present Future
2. Specific time: day time (once upon a time, a long time ago)
3. Place: a house in the forest
4. Mood (Atmosphere): somewhat suspenseful – little girl enters someone else’s house
B. Characters:

Name Physical Description Character Traits

Goldilocks little girl, long blonde hair
curious

Baby Bear little bear
-

Mama Bear medium-sized bear
-

Papa Bear big bear
angry
C. Antecedent Action: none given

II. Initial Incident:

A. Type(s) of conflict: Man versus Nature
B. Problem (in question form): What will happen to Goldilocks in the bears’ house?
C. 1st event that shows the problem:Pretty soon, she came upon a house.  She knocked and, when no one answered, she walked right in.”

III. Rising Action:

- the first event which began after the Initial Incident and that makes us wonder about the answer to the problem.

G – Goldilocks finds porridge  

B – first porridge is too hot

B – second porridge is too cold

G – third porridge is just right so she eats it

G – being tired after eating, Goldilocks looks for a chair and finds 3 of them

B – first chair is too big

B – second chair is also too big

G – third chair is just right

B – when Goldilocks sits in the third chair, it breaks

G – Goldilocks is tired and looks for a bed and finds 3 of them

B – first bed is too hard

B – second bed is too soft

G – third bed is just right so she lays down and falls asleep

B – the three bears return and view all of the damage

B – the three bears discover Goldilocks sleeping in one of the beds

IV. Climax

Goldilocks wakes up and runs out of the house.

V. Epilogue/Resolution

Everyone lives happily ever after.
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Responses

  1. Perhaps this isn’t original (and I haven’t read all of your site yet), but I just taught 5 Story Elements to my students. Plot, Characters, Setting, Point of View and Theme. I had them take a familiar fairy tale and change one to three of the elements, outline the story, then rewrite it. They just did a rough draft and then read it to each other in small groups. It seems to have helped them learn the concepts and was fun for all of us!

    • Your idea is original to me. It sounds like a great way to teach the various elements. I hope you do take time to go through the site . . . and hope you find some useful ideas. If there are things you’d like to see but don’t, please let me know. Best wishes.

      Jock


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